Reflection on Project 2 Draft

What I've learned so far about by draft is that it follows the prompt and has good points, but my presentation and organization of each paragraph can be a little more clear to make it easier to read and help my audience understand what I'm trying to say without confusion.

1) I am trying to reach students that our interested in astronomy or studying it in school. My goal is to show them and break down how someone in the astronomy region gives an argument. My audience can include students teachers or anyone who is interested in the topic. 

2) I think that readers may see that I side with the author and article that I am rhetorically analyzing, but I do it with respect and I am not bashing on the other viewpoints of this issue. 

3) Most people who will be reading this essay value astronomy and science and its goals. I believe that my paper does reach out to this values as it shows how importance science is and how it helps out our society. However I think I can add a little more about the values to my paper. 

4) I think the background information given in my essay is a good amount. In my intro I introduce the issue that is going on, and later in my essay I give more details about the issue. 

5) The language suitable for my audience can include scientifically language even though i don't use much of it. Other than that I can keep it very informational and educated and my audience will understand just fine. 

6)  I feel like I have used an informative tone. Not in a way that I am preaching to students, but more in a way of showing them how something is done to make a good argument. 

Th main revisions that I need to focus on are: looking at sentence structures and adding a variety to them, rewording a couple of sentences to make more sense, and finally check all spelling and grammar issues. 

Salena Carbajal

Brittany Newland