Revised Introduction

          New Introduction
      Bill Nye once said, "NASA is an engine of innovation and inspiration as well as the world's premier space exploration agency, and we are well served by politicians working to keep it that way, instead of turning it into a mere jobs program, or worse, cutting its budget." NASA has an immense effect to our society, and more importantly our future. The day has come where Bill Nye's fear has come true. NASA has been suffering over a series of budget cuts effecting many people and scientists in the astronomical world. The New York Times published an article called "NASA to Cut Back Scientific Missions Because of Budget", by Dennis Overbye, which overviews multiple issues that scientists and their projects have went through due to this arrangement of money. In this article, Dennis Overbye argues that these budget cuts are very detrimental to scientists and their missions at NASA by including statistical information, inside views from NASA employees and professionals on the subject, and a well organized context filled with emotional appeals towards his audience. 

Old Introduction
The company National Aeronautics and Space Administration, also known as NASA, is one of the biggest science and research companies in the United States. It is a company that creates technology, explores our universe, and researches many fields of science. Its most recognized field is Astronomy. NASA is known mostly for sending humans to the moon and other extraordinary space missions such as the Apollo missions. What many people do not think about, is that it costs billions of dollars to support any of these missions, making their budget very selective towards what they spend their money on. The article “NASA to Cut Back Scientific Missions Because of Budget” by Dennis Overbye overviews the issues that NASA is going through due to the amount of budget cuts they have been making. In this article, Dennis Overbye argues that these budget cuts are very detrimental to scientists and their missions at NASA by including statistical information, inside views from NASA employees and professionals on the subject, and a well organized context filled with emotional appeals towards his audience.

I think that my new introduction is better than my first because of it's flow. It reads smoother and gets directly to the point. It also has a much better eye-catcher than my first introduction